25 Jan 2008, 2:08pm
Fiction Writing
by Justin

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F3: ‘Celerity’

A slightly shorter one from me this week.

CELERITY

The air hums with a warm static. Quinn can feel the insistent tug of the kite, swooping lazily overhead. The copper flames of Saint Elmo lick at its treated fibres; a chaotic pattern born of the breeze. Tightening the harness, our man permits himself a brief glance behind. The bulge is fast approaching; racing over the horizon, drowning the mudflats, and lapping against the mangroves.

We’ve been waiting for this. Three billion of us, lost – like Quinn – in a single moment. We feel the alien light, dense and oppressive. We feel the kite’s strain, pulling at our arm muscles. We see with his eyes; unblinking, wild with possibility. But where he sees victory, we see the chance of salvation.

A ship and its captain. A point of calm at the front of the tidal swell.

Then celerity.

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Beautifully written. I’m not entirely sure I follow, but my best guess is that you’re writing about the first use of, and Earth’s observation of, some kind of alien FTL technology. The metaphors seem to fit.

What Shaun said. Good stuff.

 
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